Week 11: Inquiry

The task for this week is to evaluate a news article on a woman who was trapped under a train at a railway station.

The news article has repetitive information inside. Hicks, W (2013) says the need to repeat or vary words is often a clue to a bad structure.

This story provides it. The article lead paragraph says, “A WOMAN has been injured after becoming stuck under a train at a railway station in Brisbane.”

Then the next paragraph states, “Emergency services are working to free a woman from under a train on Brisbane’s north side.”

It is unnecessary to repeat or paraphrase the same information as it only makes the story longer to read.

Another problem that this news article have is the mixing of tenses. The article states that the “Emergency services are working to free a woman”. Then it was followed by a report stating that the “Woman was freed and taken to the Royal Brisbane Hospital”. This indicates that the information went from present to past tense.

The news article follows the guidelines of reporting self-harm. It contains very minimal information about the location and the person involved. The article provided links to helplines such as Lifeline and BeyondBlue for anyone with emotional difficulties to find assistance.

References

Hicks, W 2013, English for journalists: twentieth-anniversary edition, Routledge, Oxon.

O’Brien, C 2014, Woman stuck under train at Eagle Junction train station, Brisbane, viewed 7 October 2016, http://www.couriermail.com.au/news/queensland/woman-stuck-under-train-at-eagle-junction-train-station-brisbane/news-story/3fdffc6978a2cb47b0461d1dbb1177ad

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